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Larry is a girl and don’t you call her otherwise. She was found at a caravan park and handed in to the wonderful folk at Lort Smith. This is where Glynn, a social worker and avid basketballer and his partner Lauren found her.   

Unlike other felines Larry isn’t too athletic. “She’s a city cat through and through,” says Glynn. Larry spends have the days sleeping at the window. She’s wary of strangers, however, is happy to pose for photos. Next to her is a sign that reads, “Hello my name is Larry. I was born in 2017 and I’m a girl.”   

Larry enjoys scratching couches which has created headaches for her owners. She seems to be fascinated with hair ties and loves nothing more than chasing them down the hallway of her home. She enjoys the attention of a select few humans. Under the house is her favourite place to hide if she doesn’t take a liking to you. Even Glynn’s three-year-old daughter Lulu isn’t immune from Larry’s dislike of being touched.   

Sadly, Larry has been diagnosed with Stage 2 kidney disease. Glynn and his partner Lauren feed her a strict kidney diet to ensure Larry’s condition doesn’t worsen. They hope Larry will live for many years more due to the joy she brings to them and so many others.   

Larry has become a celebrity of sorts. So much so that she now has an Instagram account “larryinthewindow”. Glynn has started posting photos and videos of Larry. He says, “I’m very excited that she has generated interest in the local area.” 

Glynn and his partner Lauren moved from Perth to Melbourne fifteen years ago and have lived in North Melbourne for almost ten years. They enjoy the vibe of living in the area and its proximity to the city and local markets. Glynn says, “It’s a nice vibrant community. It can feel like a small town at times.” He travels to Perth regularly to visit family, however, enjoys returning home to Larry.   

 Edited Version 

Adopt “Larry” the cat!!! 

Lort Smith Animal Hospital is inviting residents to consider adopting Larry, a friendly, female cat whom was found at a local Caravan Park by Glynn, a social worker and avid basketballer, along with his partner, Lauren.   

Born in 2017, Larry likes a laid back, suburban lifestyle, with most days spent sleeping at the window. 

“She’s a city cat through and through,” says Glynn. “Next to her is a sign that reads, “Hello my name is Larry. I was born in 2017 and I’m a girl.”   

Glynn hopes Larry will bring others as much joy as she has brought them. 

Larry now has her own Instagram account “larryinthewindow”, garnering great popularity.  

“I’m very excited that she has generated interest in the local area,” says Glynn. 

Glynn and his partner, Lauren, moved from Perth to Melbourne fifteen years ago and have lived in North Melbourne for almost ten years. Both enjoy the feel of living in the area and its proximity to the city and local markets.  

“It’s a nice vibrant community. It can feel like a small town at times,” says Glynn. Glynn travels back to Perth regularly to visit family, however, enjoys returning home to Larry.